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Some people believe that children’s leisure activity must be educational other wise they are complete waste of time. Do you agree or disagree ?

#people #children’s #leisure #activity #waste #time
In modern times “education” is something un
separable f
not capable of being separated
inseparable
rom children’s life. It can be ca
se t
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the case
a case
hat children may enjoy their educational activities.
However
 ,
c
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,
hildren used to tired with educational activities and they transfer their attention to other activities for leisure
time
. It is completely acceptable and reasonable.
Firstly
, Not every child in the world has same habits and hobbies. Children are suppose to enjoy their childhood, in our so
ciety education i
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society, education
s must
nonetheless
 education can
also
 be stressful for children.
Secondly
, Fun
time
 is something related to getting rid of stress and regain the energy for work. If children are su
ppose t
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supposed
o do same as they do wh
ole day i
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the whole day
n their free
time
. There are possibilities they may lose energy, concentration and capacity.
As a result
 the main purpose of fun activities is destroyed. If students do th
ey w
objective case of they
them
hat they please to do in leisure
time
, it can reduce bu
rden.
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the burden
Being ti
mepassed it i
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time passed, it
time passed it
s
also
 possible to transfer their hobby into a successful career. Even though it may not be co
ncerted i
spiritually reborn or converted
converted
nto career it can have a vast effect in st
udent’s educational profile.
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the student’s educational profile
 In
this
 world every kind of talent is needed like we need singer, painter, artist, businessmen and science. If every child in the world will aim to be sc
ientist w
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scientifically
hat we will do with so many “Einstein”? So in my
opinion le
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opinion, let
t leisure
time
 be meaningful and worthwhile, it is advisable that parents should not interfere in children’s play
time
 until it is harmful and let them enjoy their precious
time
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