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Abortion increases rapidly and becomes a controversial topic. Some people suppose that abortion should be legal while others are against it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays children's foeticide activities are mushrooming at a rocketing rate. Some people argue that the government should legally approve abortion while others do not favour
this
.
This
 essay will highlight both statements and I opine that the persons who are indulging in
such
 criminal activities must be punished. Why some people favour that miscarriage should be legal in the country. Primarily, people think that being a citizen it is the right of a person to plan for a
baby
 or not. If, any circumstance arises, when they do not want a
baby
,
then
 nobody should stop them for abortion since it is a personal matter of a couple.
Additionally
, a
child
 termination can facilitate population control in the nation. When a country faces an overpopulation problem,
then
 they can opt infant foeticide solution to control the
birth
 rate. On the other side, some individuals are against of the
child
 killing before their
birth
. Since
child
 foeticide is equal to the murder, so that people are doing criminal activities.
For instance
, according to a survey report conducted by the census of India in the year 2020 there is a huge gap between the
birth
 rate of male and female
baby
child
. Most of people kill a girl
child
 before their
birth
 as they desire the
baby
 boy
instead
 of the
baby
 girl.
Hence
, in India there is a huge gender inequality. To sum up, undoubtedly, in some country's
child
-miscarriage is legal, whereas in other countries is is totally banned because it is a crime equal to murder of any human. So people should not be free to do
such
 activities without any fear of law and order.
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