more and more people want to own items, such as cars, clothing, and other things, that are made by famous brands. What are the reasons for this? Do you think or it is a positive or negative development?

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Desiring for items
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as cars, clothing, and other things that are made by well-known labels with expensive price and high quality is becoming a
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. And
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problem is a topic of concern in today’s society. In my opinion, there are both benefits and drawbacks to
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trend
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and I think that the negative is overweight the positive. There are some reasons why
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trend
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is attracting attention more and more people. The
first
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justification as well as the main advantage is high quality. Quality is one of the
first
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priorities when you want to own some things. Luxurious products always guarantee the quality of products, many people, especially successful people are willing to spend large sum of
money
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to own them.
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, owning expensive
brand
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items is as a way to show status and success.
it
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It
plays an important role in creating relationship network.
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, there are still many disadvantages in buying popular
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products.
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, the price of these products are too expensive. Not everyone can afford
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large sum of
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just to buy an item. People can use amount of
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money
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on other priorities.
For example
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, it will be more beneficial if people they put
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money
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in learning or they can use it for volunteering activities because there are a lot of people who are in poverty. So we shouldn’t use
money
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on unnecessary things.
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, it may be an opportunity to stimulate crime rate. In fact, by wearing famous
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accessories in public places, you can be assaulted because of these things. You not only lose your things, but it
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affects to your safety. The
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one,
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financial problem
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a financial problem
. Some youngsters want to keep pace with the
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while not good at
economy
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the economy
, they try to borrow
money
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to own these expensive products. It is common to see a woman buying a dress that she never wears. In summary,
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there are many good
reasons but
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reasons, but
I think it would be better if people consider carefully before buying
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luxury
brand
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items.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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