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In some countries, the cost of living is rapidly increasing. What do you think may be the reasons for this? What effects might this have on society?

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Is not a secret to anyone that life, generally, is becoming more expensive as the years pass by. There are some hypotheses about it, I will be talking about the two that I consider are the main ones, tourism and climate crisis.
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 increase could dramatically hit the global population, with emphasis on the situation of the poorest people.
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, over the
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 few years, Spain has become the most visited country in the world as it has nice weather, great citizens, an enriching culture and, of course, tasty food. Travellers enjoy all the wonders the country offers,
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, Spaniards are not as happy as the visitors. The rapid growth of tourism has caused the augment of rent prices all over the territory, focusing on the principal cities.
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, in Barcelona, neighbours have been protesting lately in order to protect their city from the lack of apartments as the majority of them are now temporary rents;
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, locals cannot afford the cost of living there anymore and have to move out.
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, people with fewer resources have to face higher barriers.
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, the temperature rise has been causing severe weather conditions that have led to the destruction of cultures.
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 crisis implies that food production is been strongly affected,
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, there is a lack of aliments in some areas,
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 in others the price has increased.
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, the production charge of corn has now almost doubled in comparison with 10 years ago,
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, meat obtained from the animals that are fed with that aliment has increased too.
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 whole issue is related to the cost of live climb, directly affecting society as some parts are not able to pay for the increments of these ailments, provoking bad nutrition in the population. To summarize, the growth of the cost of life is caused by several reasons, all of which are deteriorating physical and mental health.

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Provide more examples from different countries to further strengthen your arguments.
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Consider elaborating more on how the climate crisis affects different sectors beyond agriculture.
coherence cohesion
Attempt to connect your arguments with a smoother flow using linking words for higher clarity.
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The essay addresses the task effectively by discussing reasons such as tourism and climate crisis for the rising cost of living.
coherence cohesion
There is a clear introduction and conclusion that sum up the main points.
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Real-world examples, such as the situation in Spain, effectively illustrate your points.
coherence cohesion
The essay is well-organized with clear paragraphing that follows a logical progression.
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