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Many people think that come naturally good leaderships and many people think to get leadership to learn skill. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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One of the most conspicuous trends of today’s world is a colossal upsurge in the number of people believe that people born with
leadership
quality
 and some people developing the
leadership
quality
 from their experienced. There is a widespread worry that
this
 will only lead to a myriad of concerns in one’s
life
.
However
, I believe no one born with
leadership
quality
 and I will discuss both these view in the essay.
Firstly
, the most preponderant one is that people who play sports they have a
leadership
quality
 to lead their team to succeed in the match.
Such
 as, the person who
lead
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leads
 their team in
bad
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a bad situation
bad situations
situation
 and ability to handle the
situation
 he have a
leadership
quality
.
Secondly
, sport person can be a leader because he
know
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knows
 how to handle their team players in
bad
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a bad situation
bad situations
situation
.
For instance
, we have a great example of Imran khan who have a
leadership
quality
 Pakistan won the 1992 world cup and now became a prime minister of Pakistan of after his 20 years of struggle.
On the other hand
, people born with
leadership
quality
 they don’t have ability to handle the bad
situation
 in their
life
,
such
 as one of my friend he can’t achieve his goal on his
life
 so he decided to quit his
life
 he can’t handle the
situation
. To put in a nutshell, I pen
down saying
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down, saying
 that it is indeed a debatable issue which need
further
 analysis and discussion.
However
, in the light of
above discussed and example
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the above discussed and example
 it would be quite logical to conclude that the sport person can be a leader.
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