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As most foreign aid often benefits the door more than the receiver, developing countries should refuse to repay their debts. Do you agree?

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Repayment of loans taken by borrowers, be they individuals or nations, is obligatory and mandatory. Rich nations have been lending
money
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 to poor ones for several decades ones from loan transactions.
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,
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 essay does not support the argument that poor nations must refuse to repay the
money
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 that they have borrowed from rich nations.
On the other hand
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, loans benefit the donor nations more than the receiving ones is inherent in the process of lending.
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, loans advanced by the International Monetary Fund and World Bank, are under the control of deve
loped cou
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developing
ntries. Poor nations receive huge loans for projects proposed by these financial agencies, many of which cater to the needs of the donors themselves.
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, developing nations spend huge amounts of
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 borrowed
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 to import machinery and arms ammunition from deve
loped nat
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developing
ions.
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, all these reasons are not enough to argue ethically that loans taken should not
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not be
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d back. A loan is a loan, and irrespective of how it was spent, it should be paid back. To maintain good relations between the donor and the receiving nations, conditions of agre
ement mus
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the agreement
t be followed religiously. To abide by laws is vital for
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 very existence of mankind and, as
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, a debt should not turn out to be a bed
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that which is below standard or expectations as of ethics or decency
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t. Having looked at both the sides of the issue, it can be safely argued that since coexistence is the buzzword today, refusing to repay borrowed
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 is morally indefensible. It will
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 cause difficulties in getting help in times of need.
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