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The number of people working online from home has grown in some countries. What advantages and disadvantages can come of this trend?

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Nowadays, the technology provides the opportunity to be a worker and earn for life without being obliged to get to an office.
This
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 modern lifestyle has both its benefits and downsides, which I will discuss below. On the one hand, the advantages people enjoy from online jobs are varied.
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 of spending precious time and more on getting to a workplace, one can use those resources on doing more and earning more. Online jobs are
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 convenient, for a worker can afford other things parallel.
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, if someone cannot leave alone his/her children or another family member who needs care, freelancing would be a very good solution in that situation. Apart from that, people do not have to buy
clothes especially
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clothes, especially
 for the office appearance.
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, they can wear whatever they wish, since there is no any dress code at home.
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, there are still some drawbacks, which should be taken into consideration. Though some recent studies have shown that people use only two
third
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 of their time on job issues, while they are in offices, the importance of socialization should not be underestimated. The relations, small talks, even arguments workers have among each other help them to feel a commitment, not to be isolated. While the online workers are more likely to isolate themselves in their private worlds, which one of
the short
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the shortest
 ways to the depression and other mental problems. To sum up, the vast job opportunities the internet offers today to employees are very attractive and helpful, but from my personal view, it can cause a lot of
communicational
the activity of communicating; the activity of conveying information
communication
 problems as well.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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