Violence in the media promote violence in the society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Breakthroughs in Media have already brought about tremendous changes in all walks of human life, the world over. It is considered by many people that violence in
media
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the media
leads to the promotion of violent activities in societies. I partially agree with
this
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statement and in my
opinion it
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opinion, it
has both
poistive
characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.
positive
and negative sides. To commence with benefits, telecast of violent activities in
news
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the news
or movies not only creates
awarness
having knowledge of
awareness
among the people but
also
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makes knowledgeable about
such
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incidents.
This
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helps an individual to be more careful and prepared to face any situations.
Moreover
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, it
also
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helps to reduce crime rates.
For example
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, In recent news, a person was looted and murdered while returning to home by some criminal gang on a specific road at night, so it encourages people to avoid
such
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routes when they are travelling at night.
However
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, if we look at the downside, there are numerous detrimental effects on younger
childern
a young person of either sex
children
. Nowadays, Younger Youths, on an average spend around 3-4 hours
on
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of
watching videos on
Youtube
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YouTube
, Movies and playing Games. These media
contains
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contain
huge violent
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huge, violent
contents
such
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as shooting and
figthing
the act of fighting; any contest or struggle
fighting
scences
serial arrangement in which things follow in logical order or a recurrent pattern
sequences
scenes
.
On
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By
watching these
repeadtly
several time
repeatedly
, they easily get influenced and might tend to practice their own.
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, by seeing the wrestling videos a child could attempt the same actions on their friends and siblings.
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, In later stages, it can
effect
have an effect upon
affect
children
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children's
child's
child
behaviour and they could become aggressive. In conclusion, broadcasting violent contents helps the group of people to tackle those actions
wisely but
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wisely, but
at the same time it may provoke the youth to do
such
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violent activities.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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