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Many people believe that countries should produce food for all population eats and import food as little as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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It is a common belief that ensuring adequate
food
 for all population always a hot topic during centuries. While some people agree that the country should produce all kinds of
food
 for their residents
instead
 of getting all the
food
 from overseas countries.
However
, I cannot entirely agree with the given statement. On the one hand, some people argue that countries should make plenty of storage
foods
Suggestion
food
 for their residents because of some factors.
First
 of all, self-sufficient supply is a way to cut
food
 cost to some extent.
For example
, importing
food
 from overseas countries,
then
 the government has to deal with transportation cost, taxation, and other charges.
Moreover
, using import
food
 which can affect people’s health.
For instance
, when
food
 import in a long distance,
then
 it cannot ensure the quality or freshness.
Nevertheless
, I believe that self-sufficient supply can bring some downside for their nations.
Firstly
, it is not suitable for all the countries in the world.
For example
, some countries had been desertification and drought.
Therefore
, they cannot grow plants to supply for themselves.
Secondly
, it does not benefit the global economy.
For instance
, when a country is not connected with other countries in the world, it might become
isolation
Suggestion
isolated
 country, it might cut its
economy
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economic
 and lag behind compared
with
Suggestion
to
 the world. In
summarize
Suggestion
summarizing
, while some people think that their countries do not need to import foods or goods from foreign countries because they think the government should produce all the
food
 for them.
However
, I disagree with
this
 view because
this
 will bring some drawbacks and not suitable in some countries.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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