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Nowadays,some parents pressure their children to be successful. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or negative development?

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The pressure on children by their parents to become successful is enormous.Today's world is very competitive
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and
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in order
 to succeed children must start developing skills
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mentality
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and winning habits from a very young age.
This
 essay will discuss how
this
 pressure has a negative influence on the development of children. Nowadays there is heavy competition to succeed in all aspects of life and
this
 starts right from the kindergarten days.Parents want their kid to be the best and above all others
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and so
instead
 of letting them play and enjoy the fruits of childhood
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they are made to attend classes and learn new things.
Although
 it is true that children have the greatest grasping power to learn anything in the ages between 3-7
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pressurising them to learn stuff is only going to make the dislike the activity even more.They could do with a little less learning and more playing activities. Since
their
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there
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 are thrown into
this
 world of competition
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children end up looking at other kids as competitors rather than friends and do not mingle with others and when a
child
 grows up alone without any friends
that is
 definitely a childhood not filled with fun and happiness
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 Parents must realise that life is not a race and one can reach great distance only if they travel together and not alone in life.Parents must take into consideration that each
child
 is unique and has his or her own set of talents
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try to identify
they
objective case of they
them
 and help develop them and
also
 encourage the
child
 to do well in his own areas of interest.It is of utmost importance that they teach the
child
 to choose between good and bad decisions rather than make the choice for them. Children must not be pressurised by their parents for it will definitely have a negative influence on them.They should rather be encouraging and supportive
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