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Parents should spend more time with their children helping them with their homework. Do you agree or disagree?

#parents #time #children #homework
In
this
 global world, people are acting like machines. The daily routine of the most people, are going to work, do their job, coming home, preparing meals and sleeping. They haven't enough
time
 to be with their children. Most of children spend their
time
 in day care homes. The main problem with
this
 is, children are addicted to social media's, games and other things, that harm to their mind. The result of
this
 is children become rappers and drug addicts. So,
this
 is the most common problem in the present.
On the other hand
, children haven't any idea about, how to spend their leisure
time
. So normally, they spend their leisure
time
, by sitting in front of television or the computer. The parents can easily avoid these problems. They can find a little
time
 per day, to spend their children. By doing
this
, they can listen their child's thoughts and
also
, they can share the feelings.
Secondly
, the parents can teach the children, how to spend their leisure
time
 without the television or the computer and
also
, how can they enjoy by being with the environment. There so many things in the environment that they can learn. By helping to do their homework, parent can build up a strong bond between the child and the parent. So
this
 helps with child to share his or her thoughts with the parent. By doing
this
, we can make a pleasant and nice person in the world. Nowadays people become little bit rood for the others. By helping children for their works, we can teach them to think about the others
also
.
Then
this
 world will be a very nice place to live. In my view, analysing all these things parents should spend enough
time
 with their children for making the best persons.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • parental involvement
  • academic development
  • parent-child relationship
  • supported and encouraged
  • confidence and independence
  • educational strategies
  • autonomous learning
  • foster a love for learning
  • tailored interventions
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