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Some people believe that it is a good idea for young people to take a year off to travel or work between high school and university. Others say that it is better for students to go straight on to university after graduating from high school.

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A discussion
exist
Suggestion
exists
 between people that whether students take a
break
 to travel or go to
university
 directly after high
school
. Most students directly go to
university
 after high
school
 graduations.
On the other hand
, some students prefer to get a
year
 off to go for a trip or job, and it is good to get a
year
break
 for
vocation
leisure time away from work devoted to rest or pleasure
vacation
 and relaxation. People say that it is better to have a
break
 after
school
 graduation because of three reasons.
First
, after 12 years study, our brains
needs
Suggestion
need
 to make
rest
Suggestion
the rest
.
Second
, we need more experience before we go to
university
.
For instance
, a
year
break
 can give us enough experiences in both life and work.
Finally
, it
give
Suggestion
gives
has given
 us sufficient time to focus on our profession choice. In brief, it is good to have a
break
 after high
school
. Some people think that going to
university
 is the best option after high
school
 for two reasons.
Firstly
, you can graduate and get work sooner. As an example, a boy who graduated from high
school
 in 18 years old can get a bachelor degree from
university
 in 22 years old.
Finally
, you can start
you
of you or yourself
your
 career in a better position in your field and reach to your goal as quickly as possible.
For example
, a boy who graduated from engineering in 22 years old will start his career in engineering and can reach to highest position very soon. In conclusion, despite most students go to
university
 directly, it is good to take a
break
 for vacation and work. People have reasons on their idea about students that take a
year
 off or go to
university
 after high
school
.

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