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Some think that children should start school as early as possible, while others believe that they should start school at the age of seven. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There is no doubt that adolescence can learn in the fast pace in early education.
Although
, some people think that they should get admission when it reach to seven years of age. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both sides of the argument and explain my support for the latter view. On the one hand, those who believe early learning can be a negative impact on children in the form of stress and tension of work load.
For example
, In China, in the
last
 decade, 85 percentage teenage has found severe mental stress found due to the education
on
Suggestion
of
for
to
 the children.
This
 is the reason parents should be more concern about the children better well being and, rather than giving unusual burden on the youngsters.
As a result
, they can enjoy their life which makes them healthier, if we provide opportunity engage in the entertainment and physical activities by own choice.
However
, my view is that in
this
 fast developing world new special curriculum introduce to the earlier children, which help them to create a solid building block.
For instance
, there are many under the age of 10 years Microsoft certificate in the western countries and these numbers growing in the current trend.
Therefore
, children can learn particular skills based on their interest which they will innovate with the help of teachers, parents and
also
 apply in the daily routine life
such
 as communicating skills, arts and soon on. In conclusion, despite the workload overhead on the children, it is my firm belief that early childhood schooling plays a vital role in the carrier growth with the advancement in the primary school system.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive development
  • Social skills
  • Competitive advantage
  • Extended childhood
  • Educational system
  • Developmental stages
  • Psychological readiness
  • Curriculum
  • Peer interaction
  • Childhood development
  • Learning environment
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