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Some parents think it is good idea to give their children mobile phones, while others disagree. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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There are pros and cons of giving smartphones to children. Smartphones are great assert if used in a right way like navigation, phone calls, access information through internet and online courses/classes. If used correctly
smartphone
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 is a more like a teacher/friend. You can set reminders, take notes, set alarm,
booksreservations
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books reservations
, make appointments easily
usinga
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using a
smartphone
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. Cell phones have become an extremely popular gadget used for daily living and, in most cases, have replaced landlines when it comes to communication. Becoming more technologically advanced, these devices can take and send pictures and videos instantly, as well as connect to the web for surfing.
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Many people
, even children, now have their own cell phones, with the potential to do an endless number of tasks,
such
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 as looking for answers to certain questions.
However
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, they can
also
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 expose us to
unfavorable
not encouraging or approving or pleasing
unfavourable
 situations. As we might notice, everywhere we go, you can see a lot of people with their eyes glued to the small screens, which gives some people
a
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an
 unsightly view
on
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of
 our future. Some of us are even
obsessed with
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obsessed, with
 checking our Facebook accounts, uploading images on Instagram and tweeting about what a good time we are having,
instead
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 of actually having a good time.
Similarly
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, I would suggest a book or
news papers
a daily or weekly publication on folded sheets; contains news and articles and advertisements
newspapers
 to the children apart from
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smartphone
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a smartphone
the smartphone
smartphones
. The advantages of reading books or
news papers
a daily or weekly publication on folded sheets; contains news and articles and advertisements
newspapers
 helps children to concentrate, focus and gain knowledge. Books has
lesseffect
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less effect
 on child health compared to smartphones. Example: Children using
smartphone
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 for extended hours and have more stress to
eyes
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the eyes
, sleeplessness, etc.
Smartphones
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Smartphone
 usage by children should be supervised by parents. Children easily can get addicted to games, tv shows,
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
 very quickly.

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