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The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030.

The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030.
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The line graph illustrates
transportation-vehicles
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transportation vehicles
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 used for travelling by United Kingdom
citizens
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 in
six decade
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six-decade
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 period.
Overall
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, an increase in trains' usage for travelling concomitantly
occur
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occurs
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 with a decrease in
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buses
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bus
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 exploitation by UK
citizens
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.
However
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, cars remain the most used vehicles for travelling in the UK. It is noticeable that the commuters average number who use
buses
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 as a travelling method during the
sixty year
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sixty-year
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 period (1970 to 2030) has decreased by about 1 million.
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, the average number of
citizens
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 who use trains has increased by three times the number of those who are not benefitting
buses
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 anymore, about 3 million. It is striking that average car usage among UK
citizens
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 is way higher than the average usage of both trains and
buses
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 in 1970.
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 the experienced
gradual
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a gradual
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 increase in train exploitation, car exploitation remains the highest where it experienced a
significantly
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significant
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 increase during the given period, by about 4 million
citizens
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words citizens, buses with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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