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Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind bars. To what extent do you agree?

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In recent decades, the idea of allowing criminals to carry out unpaid social
work
, namely cleaning garbages and cultivating trees, as opposed to standing behind bars has gained in publicity, creating tension in the public.While many maintain that
this
 is an effective way to bring them back to the life, I assert that criminals will take advantage of
this
 to commit again. Admittedly
,
Accept space
,
the option to enable prisoners to help community brings several positive effects
such
 as awareness of money and skills, which will be
further
 discussed. For one thing, people who commit a crime will have their own skills after doing suitable jobs including cleaning street or cultivating trees. According to a survey in Ho Chi Minh city in 2019 by local police offices,
for instance
, they found that not only adapted criminals with a present life after being released the jail but they
also
 made a fortune by their own skills after doing community
work
. Another thing, working in difficult conditions assists criminals in understanding how hard do other individuals earn money.
Therefore
,
this
 raises their awareness of money
,
Accept space
,
which abandons their stealing behaviours.
On the other hand
, It is still likely that individuals who carry out a crime may have a few pitfalls.
Firstly
, local people will not feel peaceful when they suffer from criminals on a daily basis. In
this
 way, If prisoners carry out by their side, they have possibility to hurt or even worse kill whether those no longer have a reason to live.
Secondly
, individuals who carry out a crime are likely to escape from police’s control. Perhaps the best example of
this
 would be Ha who is a serious criminal in the
VietNam
a communist state in Indochina on the South China Sea; achieved independence from France in 1945
Vietnam
 If the police office has not allowed him to
work
 in the public, he would not dig a small tunnel to run away from them because of lacking their strict controls To recapitulate briefly, some reckon that prisoners ought to be given an opportunity to undertake in the community rather than putting them in the jail.I highly believe that when they
work
 in a place in which have strict controls from policies, they will learn a myriad of skills for themselves and arrange a new life after being released.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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