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Some people want governments to spend money looking for life on other planets. Others, however, think this is a waste of public money when there are so many problems on earth. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge or experience.

Recent speculations on the possibility of other life forms have raised questions of whether government funds should be allocated to
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 exploration or focus on fixing the problems on Earth. There are several reasons why people hold
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 and give my opinion. Life on other planets is a fascinating topic, and people are curious to see possible evidence.
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, some people believe that the government should invest in
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. Beyond curiosity, it is
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 believed that making contact with extraterrestrial life forms would play a remarkable role in innovation, advancement of science, and even future communication across planets. Proponents of
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 believe that being first to establish any contact with aliens could increase the perceived power index of their country, and all of these possibilities would surely have long-term benefits. Opponents of
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 strongly argue that there are various socioeconomic issues that require urgent attention on Earth ,
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 health care system, and environmental degradation, thereby feeling that extraterrestrial exploration constitutes a waste of the country's budget. They believe that rather than invest billions in
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 missions, it is better to fix these issues because they have direct and immediate beneficial effects on the populace.
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 both groups have strong arguments, I think that both have their advantages, and it would be beneficial to find a balance where
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 and socioeconomic problems are catered to.
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 way, we would enjoy the long-term and short-term benefits of these investments. In summary,
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 would have long-term benefits for the country, it is important that cogent issues regarding the wellness of the citizenry should
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 be well-funded.

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Make your view clear in the opening and final part. Give a firm stance on one side or a clear balance in the end.
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Add specific examples from real life or numbers to back up your point, not only general ideas.
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Use more connecting words to move from one idea to another inside each paragraph.
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Keep sentences short and simple to avoid big mistakes and help the reader.
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The essay shows both sides and gives a view.
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Good use of clear links like Hence and Opponents to connect ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unprecedented opportunities
  • extraterrestrial
  • satisfy human curiosity
  • practical benefits
  • inspiring goal
  • testament to human ambition
  • pursuit of knowledge
  • critics argue
  • imprudent
  • plague Earth
  • immediate attention
  • allocated for
  • environmental conservation
  • well-being
  • quality of life
  • balanced approach
  • advancements
  • benefits for humanity
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