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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world go hungry. Why is this case? What can be done about this problem?

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There are those who say that in
this
 twenty century, there is a large portion of hungry people while the development of agriculture is moving fast forward.
This
 essay will examine
this
problem
 and offer some solutions. In
this
 modernization era, the
price
 of
food
 becomes a major
problem
, numerous studies have consistently found that developing in agriculture takes advantage mostly
to
Suggestion
in
 the developed countries because they have the scientists, developers, and investors to support the new
technology
 in
food
 industries.
As a result
, the advances made in agriculture have a limited boundary only on some continents because, in some underdeveloped nations, governments invested a small portion of the
food
technology
 and farming system.
This
 leads to a
problem
 of
food
 ingredients which was rare and pricey because of the lack of innovation in the farming system.
Furthermore
, the
technology
 of
food
 products made the cost of
food
 and ingredients higher than usual because the machines are higher cost than using human employees and
this
 effect directly to the diet products, some people cannot afford to buy
this
 costly product.
Lastly
, in various countries, geography not proper to grain any plants or they cannot find sources of water supply.
As a result
,
food
 and basic ingredients are extremely expensive because they have to import
food
 products from other countries.
On the other hand
, the government should play a role in
this
 case.
Firstly
, they must control the
food
price
 over the markets because
food
 is a basic need of humanity and everyone should effort to pay
such
 as rice and eggs.
Secondly
, they must asset in local farming communities to make them supplier good quality products and share the market with industrial products.
Finally
, they should share the innovation of
technology
 to other poverty countries and educate people to integrate the
technology
 in their places. In conclusion, there are various causes of hungry people and the motor
problem
 pointed to the
price
 of
food
 products.
However
, the government should solve
this
problem
 by controlling
price
, invest in local farming system and share innovation with other poverty countries.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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