The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph gives information about the
percent
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of the
population
aged 65 and over in three countries over a
one hundred-year
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period between 1940 and 2040.
Overall
, the
proportion
of the elderly
population
in
three
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the three
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countries is predicted to increase, and the
percentage
of elderly
people
in
Japan
are
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predicted to reach its peak in the future. In 1940,
Japan
was the country with the lowest
proportion
of
the
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elderly
people
(5%), compared to approximately 7% in
Sweden
and 9% in the USA. From 1960 to 1980, there was a gradual increase in the
percentage
of adults'
people
65 and over in the US and
Sweden
respectively 15% and 13%. At the same time, the
percentage
of
elderly
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the elderly
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population
in
Japan
dropped dramatically (3%). By 2020, the
percentage
of
elderly
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the elderly
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population
in
Sweden
will decrease slightly (by 18%), and the
proportion
of aged
people
in the US and
Japan
will rise sharply respectively 15% and 8%. Looking into the future, by 2040,
Japan
will be the
countries
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country
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with the highest
proportion
of elderly
people
(27%), compared to approximately 25% in
Sweden
and 23%
for
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in
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the US.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, proportion, percentage, people, japan, sweden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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