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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph gives information about the
percent
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 of the
population
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 aged 65 and over in three countries over a
one hundred-year
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 period between 1940 and 2040.
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, the
proportion
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 of the elderly
population
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 in
three
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the three
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 countries is predicted to increase, and the
percentage
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 of elderly
people
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 in
Japan
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are
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 predicted to reach its peak in the future. In 1940,
Japan
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 was the country with the lowest
proportion
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 of
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elderly
people
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 (5%), compared to approximately 7% in
Sweden
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 and 9% in the USA. From 1960 to 1980, there was a gradual increase in the
percentage
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 of adults'
people
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 65 and over in the US and
Sweden
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 respectively 15% and 13%. At the same time, the
percentage
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 of
elderly
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the elderly
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population
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 in
Japan
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 dropped dramatically (3%). By 2020, the
percentage
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 of
elderly
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the elderly
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population
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 in
Sweden
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 will decrease slightly (by 18%), and the
proportion
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 of aged
people
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 in the US and
Japan
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 will rise sharply respectively 15% and 8%. Looking into the future, by 2040,
Japan
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 will be the
countries
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country
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 with the highest
proportion
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 of elderly
people
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 (27%), compared to approximately 25% in
Sweden
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 and 23%
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 the US.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, proportion, percentage, people, japan, sweden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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