Some people think that a sense of competition in children did be encouraged. Others believe that who are taught to cooperate rather than complete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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competition
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computation
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is very much needed
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, When we live in a society we have to be good in nature and it
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competation
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social responsibilities. As per
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university ,
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are suffering from Mental stress and fall sick from the word
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not compare
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every school
children
are forcing towards the first rank , they are making marks machines, Present
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competition
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becomes brand building for the society, Every
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children
should think positive
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towards the
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for the growth of the Personal or the society,We can achieve more when we think we are in front stage not the back
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gets every appreciation so that they can get motivated for the next goal, We have to think positively to keep on
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in our entire life.
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why not Mars, ISRO Scientists
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hard and
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the goal. From my point of view , Every
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should learn co-operation with the
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the
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weekness
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it will be very
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useful
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mankind.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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