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It is better for college students to live far away from home than live at home with their parents. Do you agree or disagree?

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As young adults enter
college
, they are presented with the choice of boarding at school or living with their parents.
This
 essay is going to argue that student accommodation is the optimal choice for undergraduates.
This
 point will be illustrated by looking at how living at
home
 is simply unfeasible for most students, and the benefits accruing from staying in a dormitory. Today, very few students
attend
Suggestion
will attend
 a local
college
 or university,
thus
 the idea of them staying at
home
 during school term is implausible.
This
 is particularly valid in developing nations, where most colleges are concentrated in urban
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
. Daily commute would be difficult for those who live in rural areas or even suburban residents. To these students, on- campus housing is obviously the more sensible option.
For example
, in [country], rural citizens tend to move to the city for
college
 and share a dorm room
instead
 of commuting from their residences. The choice of living at school is reinforced by the fact that it fosters personal growth in ways not
otherwise
 possible with living at
home
.
For instance
, when boarding at a dormitory, students with discrepant preferences would learn to make compromises.
This
 is not necessary if they live with their parents who are generally more accommodating.
In addition
, living away from
home
also
 teaches students to be more independent, because they must manage their personal finance as well as taking care of their own nutritional needs. In fact, Americans who lived in fraternity houses during
college
 have reported that they became more self-reliant
as a result
 of having to budget and cook for themselves. In conclusion, I strongly believe that it makes more sense for
college
 students to live on campus, for the reasons provided above.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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