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Too much money is spending on repairing old buildings instead of knocking down them and building new ones. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
It is true that it costs enormous amounts of money to preserve historical buildings rather than building modern premises.I disagree with
this
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 statement to a large extent and I think that it is worthwhile to restore ancient monuments.
Body paragraph 1
To begin
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 with the benefits of erecting new buildings as compared to protect old ones.
Firstly
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, modern premises will be built according to the requirements of modern people and it will be comfortable for them to use for any purpose.
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, school premise needs latest technology for modern education as nowadays technological gadgets are required to educate students so schools are built according to requirement of students and teachers so latest equipments can be installed and used.
Secondly
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, modern buildings would be more secure and long lasting as these places are made with latest material and
also
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 latest equipments are installed for safety purposes like sound proof doors, gadgets to withstand with earthquake or storm.
However
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,
Accept space
,
old monument may become the cause of the threat
of
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to
 human life as some historical buildings are on
extinction
Suggestion
the extinction
 and these buildings should be demolished.
Body paragraph 2
Apart from
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, there are many reasons why ancient buildings should be restored.As historical places are the identity and heritage of any country or city.If these buildings are demolished
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 history and culture of that region would die out and people cannot come to know about the past of the people and the region.By preserving these building individuals would feel connected to their ancestors and
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 theses buildings apprise new generation about the life of past people and the culture of that region.
Moreover
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, historical monuments can bring the tourism in a particular city and government can make it a source of revenue.
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, more tourists would visit these buildings and more they would spend
,
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,
thus
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 it leads to the development of that city and country as it would increase job opportunities and would encourage people to start a small business.
In addition
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 to
this
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, the authorities would make improvements to the road system and transportations.Therefor, it is win-win situations for both individuals and government.
Conclusion
In conclusion,
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 there are many advantages of constructing new buildings, to restore ancient monuments is more beneficial.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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