Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Many
people
believe that
students
in higher education should learn
subjects
that they really want
while
others suppose
students
just need to study
subjects
that they related to
science
and
technology
which is expected to be useful in the future. I will discuss both these views before giving my opinion in
this
essay below. On the one hand, many
people
opine that
students
are not allowed
study
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other
subjects
except for
science
and
technology
subjects
because
people
believe that they will benefit in the future. It can be seen that those
subjects
play a fundamental role in
development
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of mankind. With
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the advance
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advance
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advances
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of
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science
and
technology
,
high technical
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high-technical
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equipments
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are
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invented to serve
for
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people
and
have
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a
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apply
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contribution
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to improving
quality
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the quality
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of
people
’s
life
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lives
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.
For instance
, it is difficult for designers to work if they do not have laptop or
smart phone
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smartphone
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support. On the
othe
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other
hand, many
people
argue that
students
may learn whatever they want. From my perspective, I totally
agree
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this
point because
this
is a basic right of
students
that
it
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apply
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need
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to be protected.
Althought
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Although
science
and
technology
subjects
have
an
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a
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positive
impacts
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on
stride
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of
people
, other
subjects
also
play an important role in social life
such
as
subjects
about
economic
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economics
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, social
science
and humanity.
For example
, if we did not have media majors, we would not have
newspaper
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newspapers
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to read.
In addition
, we
also
need politicians to lead the country and
need
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economists to develop the country. In conclusion, it is important for
students
to study their
favorite
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subject.
Besides
, we may encourage
they
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them
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read
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to read
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or research
subjects
about
science
and
technology
in their
freetime
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free time
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
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  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
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