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📊 The plans below shows the site of mining town in the past and after redevelopment in the present day.

The plans below show the mining city in the past and after its recent redevelopment.
Overall
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, the former version of the site contained more work-related facilities,
whereas
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 the current layout has fewer specialised structures. In the past, an office was located in the north-west corner, and next to it was the mine entrance, which was only accessible to staff. South of the office , there was a changing room for workers, and nearby stood a hospital that included several rooms. On the eastern side of the map, two waste pits were situated, used by special trucks to carry sand.
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, there was a car parking area on the western side and, close to it, a separate parking space for trucks. After redevelopment, several changes were made. The former office was replaced by a museum,
while
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 the tunnel remained unchanged. The car park in the west
also
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 stayed the same. The previous lorry park, which served hospitality workers, was removed and replaced by a footpath. On the eastern corner, a new children’s playground was constructed. The most significant transformation occurred in the centre of the map, where a large covered area was introduced, containing a café, a driving track, and a picnic area.

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task response
Give a clear start and a final end. In the start tell what you compare. In the end sum up the change.
coherence cohesion
Use good links in order. Use first, next, then, and finally to show what changed.
coherence cohesion
Give more exact facts in one line. Say what is new or kept in the map.
coherence cohesion
Keep the same place name from past to present when you talk about change.
structure
The write up shows past and now well.
detail
It gives many exact spots from the map.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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