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In the past, knowledge was stored in books, but now it is stored in the Internet. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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With the development of the Internet, nowadays
knowledge
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 be preserved electronically. Some people insist that there are more drawbacks to have the
knowledge
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 in electronic format than in books.
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, I do not agree with them. It has to be admitted that the quality of the information varies a lot. There are less restrictions for people to publish articles, researches, or lectures online rather than a textbook or scientific paper.
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, sometimes even no proofread is required to upload a research article. No qualification is required to upload lecture to YouTube.
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, after years of discussion, some websites have been widely recognized as reliable
knowledge
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 resources.
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, people can easily access the
knowledge
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 on the Internet. A simple search in Google or Wikipedia will provide a lot of information in their database. The “find in page” function saves people’s time on locating the key words from the articles.
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, looking for a specific concept from hard copy books will be very time consuming, especially for those who are new to the
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. What’s more, making backups of electronic
knowledge
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 costs less money and effort. With years of usage, books can be damaged inevitably.
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, it is hard to guarantee that accidents like fire hazard or an earthquake will not happen. These accidents are so deadly to the books. We will lose the books once they occur.
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, having backups of the
knowledge
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 becomes more and more important. In conclusion, considering the importance of efficiency and backups, it is better to have
knowledge
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 stored on the Internet even though there are drawbacks.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • democratization, accessibility, socioeconomic barriers, dissemination, real-time, misinformation, misleading, necessitating, over-reliance, traditional knowledge sources, collaborative learning, interactive, engaging educational experience
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