A lot of old people suffering from loneliness these days. They also lack physical fitness. What are the reasons for these? Can you think of possible solutions?

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A group of elderly citizens

are now being

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is now being

lonely due to not being able to move with

the young

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younger

the younger

family members from place to place, as they lack physical health conditions.

This

essay will discuss

premise

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the premise

associated with senior citizens being on their own

in contrast

with

explanation

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an explanation

of resolving

this

matter. There are innumerable individuals who are self-made

person

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personally

and too stubborn to be dependable on someone

else including

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else, including

family,

therefore

, they face the dire companionship issues because of self-esteem.

On the other hand

, there are people who long for the love of family

members but

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members, but

, since being busy with work life nor their kids neither relatives, have enough time to

spear

refrain from harming

spare

for them.

As a result

, they end up in nursing homes in the supervision of a full-time nurse because of

health condition

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a health condition

However

, just like every lock has a key, there are possible ways to overcome loneliness for an aged person. If each family member takes

little

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less

time from their busy schedule to

spent

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spend

with

elderly

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the elderly

then

situation won’t be

this

much empty for them.

For example

, organizing a weekly get together with all the children will cheer their minds.

In addition

, support groups for the parents and grandparents, where they take a walk in the park, practice laughing therapy with their own

agers

matters of personal concern

affairs

is a miraculous option to overshadow the isolated feelings. To conclude, for a time being, everyone is entitled to face isolation and non-adaptive situations, which doesn’t mean there is no escape to

this

remote sense. With the help of family and friends, plenty of solutions can be figured out while physical health can be improved

with

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daily monitoring.

Wed Feb 19 2020

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A lot of old people suffering from loneliness these days. They also lack physical fitness. What are the reasons for these? Can you think of possible solutions?

Your opinion

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