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7. Today, most people get married and give birth in their thirties rather than when they are younger.Is it a positive or negative development in your opinion? To what extent do you support this development?

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Nowadays, the majority of individuals marry and have babies in their thirties than at a younger age.
This
 is a positive development as it allows the couples to develop a strong
career
 and be financially stable.
However
, because of the concerns of an increasing number of infertility issues, I completely disagree with
this
 development.
Firstly
, late
marriage
 is beneficial to the individuals in many ways. One of the prominent benefits of the same is the ability to develop their
career
 paths. Before
marriage
, people are generally free to explore different careers and because of having plenty of time, they can decide better about the
career
 that they can pursue during the rest of their life.
Secondly
, late
marriage
 allows an individual to be financially stable and abide by the responsibilities conferred by
marriage
 more carefully.
Marriage
 brings in new responsibilities and requires money for the fulfilment of those responsibilities.
For instance
, in a recent study by 'The Times", it has now been proven that people, who are married after their thirties, are better able to fulfil their responsibilities both financially and mentally.
Thus
 we can say that late marriages are better than earlier ones.
On the other hand
, late marriages are proven harmful to the women. With the passage of time, the reproductive power of the women decreases. In a research by WHO,
for instance
, it has now been proven that the chances of a woman getting pregnant almost halves after attaining the age of thirty.
Then
 what is the benefit of getting married if they cannot have children?
This
 becomes a cause for disturbance in the family and sometimes leads to serious consequences of divorce. In conclusion, white, late marriages offer benefits of
career
 and financial stability, due to the issue of infertility, I disagree with
this
 development.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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