Old generation often hold some traditional ideas. However this is not helpful for younger generation.

In
contemporary era
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the contemporary era
, There is intense argument over the issue that Traditional concepts are normally held by older
generations but
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generations, but
at the same time these are not
benificial
promoting or enhancing well-being
beneficial
for the youth. A certain demographics of society favours it,
however
rest averse it.
This
essay disagrees that traditional perception are not
crutial
of extreme importance; vital to the resolution of a crisis
crucial
for juvenile.
Firstly
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Firstly, this
this
essay will discuss that it spreads awareness about the
individuals
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individual's
individual
individuals'
cultural
background
.
Secondly
, discuss that it teaches survival skills to the youth. One approach is that
traditinal
consisting of or derived from tradition
traditional
believes spreads awareness among the youngsters about
there
of them or themselves
their
cultural
background
.
Moreover
It teaches the individuals about the rich history of
there
of them or themselves
their
ancestors. Since the individuals will know more about
there
of them or themselves
their
historical
background
they can pass on
this
crutial
of extreme importance; vital to the resolution of a crisis
crucial
information
to
Suggestion
for
the
next
upcoming
generation
. To cite an example a recent MIT research revealed that the young individuals knew almost everything about
there
of them or themselves
their
traditions just because they were in
contant
unvarying in nature
constant
touch with the people of
older
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older generations
the older generation
an older generation
generation
. Another point to consider is that these traditional beliefs of the older
generation
taught some significant survival skills to the youngsters. These skills will not only help them to enhance
there
of them or themselves
their
presnality but
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personality, but
personality but
will
also
play
a
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an
important role in teaching them some life saving skills.
For instance
, Nelson survey conducted in 2018 revealed that 80% of the youth in a society knew
there
of them or themselves
their
traditional survival skills as they followed the
guide lines
a light line that is used in lettering to help align the letters
guidelines
of the people of
older
Suggestion
older generations
the older generation
an older generation
generation
. All the above discussed assertions lead to
conclution
Suggestion
conclude
conclusion
conclusions
that traditional concepts held by older
generation
are
crutial
of extreme importance; vital to the resolution of a crisis
crucial
for youngsters as it spreads awareness about
there
of them or themselves
their
historical
background
also
it provides knowledge about survival skills.

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