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Some people say that only reason for learning foriegn language Is in order to traveL to or work in foriegn country. Other say these are not the only reasons. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Having a command on mother
language
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 of the nation, in which a person resides, plays a vital role for him/her. It is argued by some that people learn external linguistics, either for study or work abroad, whereas others consider the different purposes expect the given;
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, in my opinion, multiple other motives exists to grip on overseas
language
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 of all, one of the predominant purpose is
cost
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 of trade among the countries because it is necessary to understand the requirements and feedback of customer(s) living across the country. Usually, when a company exports their goods to external countries they hire translators from those lands; which results in higher
cost
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, that
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 impacts the gross profit of that company. The back to back communication with that translator is a barer between client and provider, which
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 wastes time, and time is directly proportional to
cost
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. Amazon
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 and Ali Baba are the best examples, where multiple countries hosted their global business without learning overseas
language
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(s) and not even employed a linguistic master, to reduce the
cost
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; faced dramatic fall in their sales and received poor feedback. In
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 case, should company close their trade or keep suffering through
cost
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therefore
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, seeking the languages is beneficial in overcoming the
cost
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.
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, English, the world recognized
language
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 is now compulsory in most of countries, where it is not the
first
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language
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. Because, most of the books, articles, research work, etc., are all written in English, and available across the world. I have been through an article and recapitulated that, around 30% of pupils in developing countries are griping on English to meet worldwide education standards. So, learning English is a must now. To sum up, people are of dissimilar views regarding learning foreign languages, I agree with those who believe there are many other reasons for learning foreign languages rather than for study or work.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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