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The proliferation of social
media
platforms has significantly altered the way we interact, leading many to argue that digital connections are supplanting traditional face-to-face interactions.
This
essay will consider both perspectives on
this
issue, with a focus on the Vietnamese context. The argument is that social
media
has detrimental impacts on social
interaction
. The primary concern is that without face-to-face
interaction
, many relationships generally, would be faded, lacking the emotional richness that comes with physical
interaction
.
For instance
, in Vietnam, the elderly often express bewilderment and sadness as they observe younger family members absorbed in their smartphones during family gatherings, traditionally a time for bonding and meaningful conversation.
As a result
, relationships between members of a family
,
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would break down. At the same time, they would be able to lack of feeling emotions about mental
However
, I believe that the benefits of social
media
in contemporary society outweigh the drawbacks.
Firstly
, these platforms offer unprecedented opportunities for connectivity and information dissemination. During the COVID-19 pandemic, millions of Vietnamese were reliant on platforms like Facebook and Zalo for up-to-date information and as a means to maintain social ties when physical contact was restricted.
Moreover
, social
media
facilitates connections that would be
otherwise
impossible, bringing together like-minded individuals regardless of geographical constraints.
For example
, a young Vietnamese entrepreneur in Hanoi can easily collaborate with a tech expert in Ho Chi Minh City, optimizing both their productivity and social capital. In conclusion,
while
the ascendancy of social
media
has engendered legitimate concerns about the erosion of face-to-face interactions, its advantages in enhancing communication and accessibility are too significant to overlook.
Therefore
, it is my conviction that the benefits of social
media
interaction
outweigh its associated disadvantages
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bilingual
  • multilingual
  • fluency
  • communicate
  • cognitive skills
  • cultural awareness
  • opportunities
  • globalized world
  • job market
  • interact
  • linguistic abilities
  • cultural exchange
  • language proficiency
  • language barrier
  • foreign travel
  • personal growth
  • academic achievement
  • self-confidence
  • enhance
  • cross-cultural communication
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