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the chart below shows the growth in the population in some of the world largest cities as well as the population distribution in urban and rural areas

the chart below shows the growth in the population in some of the world largest cities as well as the population distribution in urban and rural areas
#growth #population #world #cities #distribution #areas
The bar graph gives information
of
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about
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population
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the population
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 increase in 4 different cities,
also
 the urban and rural
areas
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areas'
area's
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population
 distribution. As
it
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apply
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can be seen from the graph, the most populated
city
 was Tokyo as
it
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isit
wasit
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 similar to Bombay with approximately 25
million
people
. The
quantity
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number
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 of
people
 in Tokyo was over 16
million
 and
Bombay
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in Bombay
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 was 5
million
,
then
 Tokyo increased to over 20
million
 and Bombay 11
million
 before it became the most populated
city
 in 2010. The least populated
city
 was Jakarta with under 5
million
people
 in 1970. The
quantity
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number
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 of
people
then
 increased to
near
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nearly
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 10
million
people
 in 1990,
then
population
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the population
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 rose to more than 15
million
people
. New
York
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York's
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Population
 was 14
million
 in 1970, and it shows growth to 16
million
 and hit 17
million
 in 2010. New York has become the least populated
city
,
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 and does not show
a
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significant growth.
While
 Shanghai, had become the
third
 most populated in 1970, but
then
 it increased steadily to 13
million
, before it increased minimally to 16
million
.

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, city, million, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 5 times.
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