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The diagram illustrates the process of the way how to manufacture
yogurt which
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yogurt, which
 people usually eat as a dessert in 7 steps.
First
 of all, heat the milk at 90 Celsius degree (200 Fahrenheit) and
then maintain
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then maintains
 the high temperature for 10 to 30 minutes; the time decides how
thick
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the thickness
thickness
 of the
yogurt
.
Second
 of the steps is that cool milk at 44 Celsius degree (112 Fahrenheit), after that add the "
yogurt
 starter" which is used for creating bacteria. From that point, incubate
yogurt which
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yogurt, which
 is mixed by "milk and
yogurt
 starter" for four hours at 37 Celsius degree (100 Fahrenheit). After 4 hours, stop incubating and place
yogurt
 in
cool place
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a cool place
 and
then
 add some fruits, sweeteners and
flavorings
something added to food primarily for the savor it imparts
flavourings
 so that people can enjoy the
flavor
the general atmosphere of a place or situation and the effect that it has on people
flavour
 of it.
Lastly
, fill and label containers, pack for shipping. After manufacturing processes, we can
finally
 consume it which is familiar to us in any market.

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