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Many people use distance learning program to study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the benefit as much attending college or universities. To what extend do you agree and disagree?

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Nowadays people are more eager to learn and grow. People want to go higher studies, but due lack of time they are trying are going for distance learning programs.
Although
, these courses help them to learn along with their job, but they cannot get the right kind of exposure. People have become very ambitious and no one wants to leave their job. They believe that rather than, spending two years in college or any university, it’s better to go for these programs.
This
 kind of approach will not only help them in learning a new course, but will be very beneficial from their career point of view.
Firstly
, while working you can easily pay for your higher studies, you don’t need to be dependent for financial help of anyone.
For example
, a person who works in one of the best multinational company parallel studies MBA from distance program. And once he will finish the course, will soon promote to regional manager post without taking breaks from work.
On the other hand
, some people think attending college is a better option than pursuing the distance program.
Although
, one need to take breaks from work life, but gets a better opportunity to grow academically and professionally.
Firstly
, you meet people coming from different backgrounds and culture along with different skills and talent.
For example
, if a student from a Korean country can help others learn
this
 language.
Similarly
,
this
 goes for students from countries like France, Spain, Germany or Japan. To conclude, I would say the job is important for survival, but not at the cost of the personal growth. Undoubtedly, time is very crucial and should be invested in my right things. People who do not attend regular classes, will never get practical knowledge. These colleges not only help you basic educate, but let you understand how the industry works.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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