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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rathe than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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There are 2 advantages to take into consideration that some researchers believe that it is better for
children
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 to start learning the other
language
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 at primary
school
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 rather than secondary
school
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. The obvious argument in its favour is that
children
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 will be familiar quickly with the other
language
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 the fact that the memory of
children
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 isn’t complex and they can easily absorb information.
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,
children
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 in bilingual schools can communicate naturally a foreign
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 and they have higher confidence than
children
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 in local schools.
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, they can have the independence to use international
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, the advantage is the benefit of fast start learning.
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 is because students can easily access opportunities and experiences.
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, students can exchange study abroad and they have experience from when they were young.
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, pupils will have opportunities to do work and to go abroad in the future.
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, there are disadvantages, how to teach is the most important for
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 in some countries to study a second
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 since primary
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 but they can not use it .
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 the fact that not standard teaching will lead to useless learning of
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, the government has to improve course in the country. In conclusion, starting to learn a foreign
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 at primary
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, there are many advantages if the course has high quality by supporting
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 to use other languages in daily life and often practise four skills,
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, listening, writing, speaking and reading.
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Introduction
Focus on the clarity of your thesis statement, making sure it presents a clear stance on the advantages and disadvantages.
Coherence
Work on developing your body paragraphs with clear topic sentences that match the contents of the paragraph.
Sentence Variety
Include more varied and complex sentence structures to enhance the flow of your essay and present your ideas more effectively.
Balanced Discussion
Consider adding a more detailed comparison between the advantages and disadvantages to clearly answer whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
Examples
Good use of examples to support your arguments.
Organization
Clear organization and progression of ideas throughout the essay.
Vocabulary
Effective use of vocabulary relevant to the topic.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive development
  • Primary school
  • Foreign language acquisition
  • Phonetic flexibility
  • Cultural immersion
  • Global citizenship
  • Enhanced academic performance
  • Early exposure
  • Pronunciation
  • Language pedagogy
  • Bilingual education
  • Resource allocation
  • Curriculum planning
  • Mother tongue
  • Native language competence
  • Language proficiency
  • Workload management
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