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Band 8.5

There is a problem with the changing rooms in the sports centre that you visit. You have complained several times but with no success. Write a letter to the manager of the sports centre. In your letter: &Describe what the problem with the changing rooms is &Say what happened the last times you complained &Explain what you want the manager to do.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to bring to your attention a persistent issue with the changing
rooms
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 at your sports centre. The problem lies in the lack of cleanliness and maintenance in the changing
rooms
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, which has been a source of frustration for many patrons, including myself. Despite having raised
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 issue several times with the staff at the sports centre, there has been no improvement in the condition of the changing
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. The
last
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 time I complained, I was assured that the matter would be looked into, but unfortunately, the situation remains unchanged. I urge you to take immediate action to address
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 problem. It is essential for the
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 experience of the patrons that the changing
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 are clean, well-maintained, and hygienic. I would appreciate it if you could allocate resources to ensure regular cleaning and maintenance of the changing
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 to provide a pleasant environment for all users. Thank you for your attention to
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 matter. I hope to see a positive change in the near future. Yours faithfully, Arthur

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structure
Your letter is very well-structured and easy to follow. However, you can enhance the logical structure by including more specific details about the problem. For example, describe exactly what is unclean or poorly maintained in the changing rooms.
task achievement
For a higher task achievement score, you might include a brief sentence explaining why a clean changing room is important for patrons. This would emphasize the significance of your complaint.
structure
The greeting and closing of your letter are polite and appropriate, which works well for your tone.
task achievement
You have a suitable writing tone that is respectful yet firm, which is very effective for this type of letter.
structure
Each paragraph addresses a single idea clearly and concisely, making your letter easy to follow.
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