In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

Recently the topic whether to have a gap
year
between passing your high
school
with flying colours and actually entering the universities has become highly disputatious. Supporters validate, that that's very beneficial; because it makes students more responsible and it allows them to gain various information from different people.
However
, opponents proclaim that it has a plethora of negative; as it delays students one whole
year
to attend their
university
and because it's difficult for students to work, while they are still teenagers. In
this
essay we are going to discuss the pros and cons of
this
. It has been stated that there are myriads of perks,
such
as allowing young people to depend on themselves and gathering different information from various characters. If you travelled alone to another country,
then
you will have to be totally conscious; in order not to be stolen.
In addition
, that you will have to deal with different personalities in different places, which will definitely improve your communication skills.
For example
, My friend worked between her high
school
and
university
in Spain.
Although
she has a very good social skills, she was unable to socialize with tough and mean people. Despite the fact that she was coerced to learn Spanish, which was the cancer to her dreams and aspirations; in order to talk to the native people there, she ended up gathering a lot of knowledge about Spain and Europe in general. Working at
such
a young age build up their characters and widen their knowledge. Viewing the other side of the coin, not only do some people find working after high
school
useless, but
also
time-consuming. Despite the fact that students will gain information from working in
such
a young age, they will delay their
university
studies by one
year
.
In addition
to,
that is
might affect the psychology of the students negatively, that all of his friends are officially working and he is still studying at the
university
, and it is useless as he will not work with a high salary; because he is undergraduate.
Fo
r example, If
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an undergraduate
he gathered the money, which he will spend to travel and
instead
of travelling, he opened his own business,
this
will be much more profitable and beneficial. Investing the money in any business will definitely be a better choice. To cap it up, some people are motivated to have a gap
year
after finishing high
school
to work or travel by their own. Despite the fact that it helps to mature their personalities and enrich their knowledge, it wastes a lot of time and cost. I think that the positives outweigh the negatives; as it is essential to relax and be more mature before attending the
university
.
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Example:

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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