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Many people thought that children have to do homework in their free time. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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In the present age, education is playing an increasingly important role in every country. In the meantime, some people believe that it is necessary for students to finish their exercises even in their spare time. Personally, I think their view is overly simplistic and I believe there are other activities except for study which will have a beneficial impact on students.
First
 of all, joining various kinds of extra-curricular activities,
such
 as camping and hiking will relax their bodies and minds since most students are under too much peer pressure currently.
Moreover
, if children have a chance to travel with their family to different places and interact with the local residents, it will definitely broaden their horizons and enrich their experience. Except that, the students who live in a needy family might need to find a part-time job in order to support themselves, if they only spend hours on finishing tasks given by the school they might not be able to earn enough money for their
next
 semester. Admittedly, students should give a priority to study and it is apparent that finishing their homework will assist them with reviewing the courses and having a better understanding. More specifically, the main purpose of giving practises is to help students digest and have a good command of knowledge.
Moreover
, it is common for students to waste their life playing computer games and some of them might even be addicted to the mobile phone which will have a baneful impact on them physically and mentally.
Nevertheless
, I believe that students’ spare time should not be occupied fully with homework, there is plenty of knowledge in
this
 world which they cannot learn from textbooks. Overall, I am convinced that it is worthwhile for students to arrange their leisure time independently while it should
also
 schedule the space to study.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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