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It is more important for students to study history and literature than it is for them to study science and mathematics.

Some people believe that students should
study
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 more
history
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 and literature.
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, other people think that studying
science
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 and mathematics is more important. From my experience and observation, I think that students should
study
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 both
science
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 and
history
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. Below, I will outline some basic reasons to support my opinion.
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 of all, I believe that studying
history
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 and literature is important for the range of interests of students and people on the whole. It extends the range of interests and teaches people to analyse their
history
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. Every person should know the
history
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 of the country where he or she was born. Knowledge of
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's roots and origins gives the opportunity to understand many things that are around.
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 of all, I think that
this
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 kind of knowledge is essential for students who are going to be lawyers, newspapermen, political figures, etc.
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 more reason to
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history
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 is that it helps
one
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 to analyse mistakes made by ancestors or learn from their wise decisions. From the other side, I think that it is
also
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 important for students to
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science
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. Personally, I like studying mathematics because for me it is very interesting to work with figures, analyse them, develop different ways to solve the problem. It teaches
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 to think logically and improves
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's ability to think non-typical. I think it is great. Studying of
science
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 allows people to improve their living conditions, make discoveries, develop innovations, etc. Scientists work on new vaccines and pills to make our life longer and happier. They make researches in different fields from medicine to space. Because of
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 kind of knowledge humankind has opportunities to watch TV, fly, using jet aeroplanes, surf the Internet, play computer games, watch movies, drive cars, etc. In conclusion, I think that students must
study
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 many things, including
science
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 and literature in order to succeed in the modern world.

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