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Some children find some subjects such as mathematics and philosophy too difficult to learn, so some people argue that those subjects should be optional rather than compulsory. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Adding suitable and required subjects in the
school
 curriculum have been a paramount consideration for an educational department. It becomes a debatable issue to make some subjects
such
 as mathematics and philosophy optional because it seems arduous to learn for some. I partially agree and disagree with
this
 concern as I believe mathematics should be a compulsory
subject
, whereas philosophy can be an optional
subject
. I intend to discuss my views in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin
 with, Mathematics is an enormously important
subject
 to be taught to students as it plays a sterling role to learn other subjects.
For example
, calculating speed in physics is only possible if numeracy is taught to students.
Moreover
, not only it is requisite
subject
 to take admission in many renowned universities for higher courses, but
also
 analytical skills are utmost essential to get hired by many Multinational Companies for various job profiles.
For instance
, if a phobia is not surmounted in childhood, it would pronounce more worse in future.
Therefore
, studying mathematics is compulsory for every student till high
school
 level. Philosophy is the
subject
 to teach about humankind's relationships and it is a good
subject
 to study,
however
, making
this
subject
 not optional would not only makes students bored but
also
 adds additional burden on them. Children have been learning these basic skills from their parents and teachers by observing them.
Therefore
, it should not be enforced by making it a required part of the
school
 curriculum in their early
school
 years as it can be learnt later at territory level. To conclude,
although
 both subjects are worth considering, making mathematics compulsory is required in terms of learning other subjects, honing analytical skills that are essential for getting renowned jobs and admitting in reputed universities for pursuing higher degrees. Philosophy can be opted by students as per their interests and it should be optional.
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