You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Your friend recently came to your birthday party and bought you an expensive present. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • thank your friend • explain how useful the present is • arrange to meet up with your friend sometime soon Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear……………………,

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Dear Neha,

This

is to write about an expensive present which you gave me on my birthday. I am so lucky

Correct word choice

apply

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I have

best

Add an article

a best

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friend like you who helps me in every situation. When I opened your gift I found the Apple

Watch

series

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Series

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9 in the box.

Firstly

I was really fascinated with the

color

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colour

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of the

watch

, which was light gold. Actually, I

want

Wrong verb form

wanted

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to buy

this

watch

on my birthday because of

less

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the low

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budget I was unable

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to.

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It is really useful for me as you know I am working in a restaurant as a team leader where it is difficult to see

phone

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my phone

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again and again, I saw every notification on

this

watch

. On top of that whenever I go outside I do not have to pay by getting my phone outside I can easily pay anywhere with

this

watch

. Next month my siblings decided to go

Toronto

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to Toronto

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to see Niagra Fall so I want you to come with us. we will enjoy

lot

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a lot

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and click various pictures together. Looking forward to seeing your positive and prompt response from your side. With love, Jas

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Coherence and Cohesion

Consider breaking down complex sentences to increase clarity. Some sentences can be made more concise to improve readability.

Coherence and Cohesion

Ensure that each paragraph addresses a single idea more explicitly to enhance coherence and cohesion.

Task Achievement

You have effectively thanked your friend and explained how the present is useful, fulfilling the task requirements.

Task Achievement

The tone of the letter is appropriate and friendly, suitable for writing to a friend.

Coherence and Cohesion

Your letter has a clear greeting and closing, making it well-structured.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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2
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

188 words

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