The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph provides information about the
amount
of fast food consumed in the United Kingdom over a twenty-years period between 1970 and 1990.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the
consumption
of
hamburger
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hamburgers
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,
fish
and
chips
increased considerably.
In addition
, the
amount
of
pizza
that
people
consumed declined gradually. In 1970,
Pizza
was the kind of fast food with the highest
consumption
, on average,
people
consumed 300
grams
, compared to
approximated
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60
grams
for
fish
and
chips
,
40
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and 40
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grams
for
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a hamburger
the hamburger
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hamburger
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hamburgers
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. Between 1970 and 1980, there was a sharp growth in the
amount
of
hamburger
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hamburgers
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,
fish
and
chips
consumed; to 80
grams
and 150
grams
respectively.
In contrast
, there was a rapid drop in the
amount
of
pizza
that
people
consumed, from 300
gram
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grams
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to 220
grams
. In 1985, the
consumption
of
pizza
plummeted
significant
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to 200
grams
; the
amount
of
hamburger
consumed continued to rise to 120
grams
. From 1985 to 1990, the
amount
of
fish
and
chips
reached its peak at 500
grams
. During the same period, there was a dramatic growth in the
amount
of
hamburger
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hamburgers
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that
people
consumed from 120
grams
to 280
grams
.
Moreover
, there was a slight increase in the
consumption
of
pizza
, with a rise of over 10
grams
in just 5 years from 1985 to 1990.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, consumption, hamburger, fish, chips, pizza, people, grams with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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