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2. Online education is becoming more and more popular. Some people claim that e-learning has so many benefits that it will replace face-to-face education soon. Others say that traditional education is irreplaceable. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#education #people
It is often argued that distance learning has gained popularity and tended to overweigh traditional
education
 while others suggest that face-to-face
education
 is necessary.
Although
 e-learning has various advantages, I still believe that we
can not
can not
cannot
 cancel the traditional way. There are several reasons why online
education
 is of paramount importance.
Firstly
, each individual shows different abilities.
Therefore
, the students can work at their own pace, do not need to afraid of falling behind the study.
Secondly
, they are entitled to participate in any course or subject they desire.
This
 not just prevents them from being judged by the same standard as
others but
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others, but
also
 encourages a positive attitude toward studying.
Moreover
, learning via the internet reduces it reduces the obstacles in the way studying,
such
 as bad weather and long distance from classes.
For instance
, I remember having absent from my important lesson due to the heavy rain which led to terrible congestion.
On the other hand
, interactive learning still has a fundamental role.
First
 of all,
this
 method creates a suitable environment for students to develop social skills,
such
 as team-building, public speaking,
…
Accept space
…
 It
also
 provides a strict supervisor for those who are lazy and do not make effort catching up with other
leaners
someone (especially a child) who learns (as from a teacher) or takes up knowledge or beliefs
learners
loners
.
For example
, if a student often plays truant, the teacher will immediately give feedback
for
Suggestion
to
 the parents and
then
 make sure that the disobedient child is always under the control. In conclusion, despite the fact that e-learning plays a vital role nowadays in many countries, I still believe that traditional
education
 should not be replaced.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-Learning
  • face-to-face education
  • remote learning
  • virtual classroom
  • webinar
  • digital platform
  • self-paced learning
  • interactive learning
  • course accessibility
  • academic networking
  • pedagogy
  • synchronous/asynchronous sessions
  • MOOCs (Massive Open Online Courses)
  • edtech (educational technology)
  • holistic development
  • practical skills
  • collaborative learning
  • digital divide
  • curriculum adaptation
  • technological literacy
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