"Prevention is better than cure." Out of a country's health budget, a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and preventative measures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
It is often said that "
health
is wealth". Out of a nation
strength expenditure, an enormous ratio ought to be shifted from treatment to expense on Change noun form
nation's
health
education and preventable steps. I firmly accord
that money should be spent on Verb problem
agree
health
knowledge. Firstly
, if the money divert
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diverted
in
providing fitness knowledge, it would be a huge change because sometimes people do not know about Change preposition
to
health
literacy, and they caught
up by some disease which can be treated but Add a missing verb
are caught
treatment
Add an article
the treatment
cost
an arm and a leg. To exemplify, in Wrong verb form
costs
Add an article
the village
a village
village
so many people Fix the agreement mistake
villages
caught
up Add a missing verb
are caught
by
infectious Change preposition
in
disease
which can be cured Fix the agreement mistake
diseases
by
little education Change preposition
with
of
well-being. Correct your spelling
or
Secondly
, these measures can take
by simply doing, Wrong verb form
be taken
such
as tv
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TV
commercial
,Fix the agreement mistake
commercials
advertisement
, and street Fix the agreement mistake
advertisements
show
.Fix the agreement mistake
shows
Moreover
, this
also
can be stopped by telling the side effects of tobacco and alcoholic drinks. Furthermore
, the government should encourage and aware the public of
diseases Correct word choice
aware of
can
Correct pronoun usage
that can
prevent
by doing yoga or gym. Wrong verb form
be prevented
For example
an
as Correct article usage
apply
per report
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reported
of
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by
Times
of India few studies Correct article usage
the Times
shows
the government initiativeCorrect subject-verb agreement
show
of
stop smoking was successful Change preposition
to
hence
of
the advertisements and street shows. Change preposition
apply
Finally
, these
Correct determiner usage
the
moneys
spent on hygiene knowledge and preventable measures by countries are huge and after Change the wording
money
amounts of money
sums of money
certain
time Add an article
a certain
this
can be profitable for that country's economy and people can be able to spend that fund on good things. To sum up
, I agree that prevention is better than cure because which
disease can be tackled via preventative measures and education so it ought to be the best spend on fitness information and preventable steps.Correct pronoun usage
apply
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