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Some people believe that a crime is a result of social problems and poverty, others think that crime is a result of a bad person’s nature. Discuss both these views and give your opinion?

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One of the problems in modern society is the ongoing criminal activities, with conflicting views on which one is to blame between sociological instability and the personality traits of the person who commits the crime. One opinion claims that some people are born with a set of psychological characteristics that display the tendency toward criminality. Advocates of
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 believe that individuals with antisocial, psychopathic, or narcissistic personality may have the reasoning part of brains responsible for self-control impaired. They may
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 engage in criminal thrill-seeking behaviours to compensate for low levels of arousal.
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, hormones related to aggression and violence,
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 as testosterone and dopamine, have been cited by researchers as biological factors that drive someone to commit a crime.
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, there are aspects which have not been considered. If a person grows up in a dysfunctional family where there are neglected, abuse, and misbehaviour, especially with the father figure, he may learn inappropriate responses to situations, leading to offensive behaviour. On top of that, the number of crimes committed out of necessity still remains high From a personal perspective, social and environmental factors are the ones we need to pay more attention to as they are resolvable. Living in a community with poor housing and low health, as well as socioeconomic disadvantage, citizens are predisposed to social structure pressure. Those pressures either make the citizens feel tempted to run illegal get-rich-quick schemes or influence them to seek substances like alcohol and lose self-control under the effect of
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 substances. In conclusion, crimes are committed under a combination of the nature of the criminal himself and the context that he was in. By addressing the current social inequality, the important catalyst, the rate of crime should significantly go down.

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