The majority of news being reported bad news such as wars, famines, accidents and crime. Why do you think that is? Do you think news should be a balance of both good and bad news?

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It is true that nowadays a major proportion of
news
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the news
consist
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consists
of criminal acts, accidents and violence between different countries. In my opinions, I believe that there are
twon
being one more than one
two
tons
ten
reasons behind
this
situtation including
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situation, including
situation including
competition among news sources and the easy way to get profit;
however
, there ought to be a balance between negative and positive news reporting for the benefit of a society. On the one hand, there are several factors why media promote negative reporting.
To begin
with, increasing number of channels has increased competition to become best among others.
In other
words every
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words, every
media house is trying to
creat
make or cause to be or to become
create
curosity
a state in which you want to learn more about something
curiosity
in public by showing
such
material to get
response
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a response
responses
from people.
Moreover
, gaining popularity has become the main focus of news resources to earn a huge amount of profit. For
intance
an occurrence of something
instance
, a survey done by Oxford university stated that the most popular form of reporting in England is
criminal
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crime
criminality
and violence.
On the other hand
, I think that media should be unbiased in case of publishing news and must promote both
kind
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kinds
of reporting. One of the main reasons is that it is their ethical responsibility to
creat
make or cause to be or to become
create
craft
curate
hormony
compatibility in opinion and action
harmony
and
sense
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a sense
of safety in community and
this
can be achieved by publishing positive content.
For example
, achievements of athletes and successful events organized by rival countries could be the best way. Another compelling reason is that a mixture of news will not only attract more audience, but
also
can be a way to generate financial benefits by increasing number of followers. In conclusion,
although
media
personels
a human being
persons
personnel
are focusing more on negative incidents to generate better response for achieving financial advantages, I argue that
equal proportion
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an equal proportion
equal proportions
of both kind of news should be the approach for the betterment of society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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