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People should choose their course of study not on the basis of their own interests, but based on the kinds of jobs they can get. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Education always played an important role in providing knowledge to people. A number of people argue that courses should be opted based on the job opportunities, while others think it should be based on personal interest. I would like to discuss both the views of
this
 topic in
this
 essay.
To begin
 with, people who intend to get jobs should focus on courses that help them achieve jobs in their career path.
This
 is because the courses that were chosen will provide them with knowledge
that is
 required to
work
 in a company.
For instance
, students who choose programming languages like Java and Python have already mastered the skills to code in college and will be ready to
work
 in company without training.
In addition
 to that, they will have hands on experience on projects and are exposed to critical and redundant problems. To illustrate, students will be aware of real world technical problem that might occur during the project saving both time and money for the company.
On the other hand
, people who are interested in a particular course
work
 should pursue their interest.
This
 might solve critical problems that have not been solved previously, helping society.
For example
, some students are interested in solving energy storage problem with the help of
graphine
written or drawn or engraved
graphic
 batteries, as it was not solved from many centuries.
Furthermore
, showing interest in new paths may open up new job opportunities and help create new jobs and solve problems at the same time. In conclusion, people who are focused to get jobs must take courses that help them to excel in job opportunity, while the other who are interested in solving new and challenging problem should focus on their interested course
work
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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