Nowadays, people believe that governments should invest tax-payer’s money in healthcare, others believe that money should be use in other areas. Discuss both points of view and give your opinion.

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Some people argue that the government income from taxes is needed to be used only in healthcare;
however
, a few people are opposed
with
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to
this
statement and think that
this
money should implement in different areas. From my point of view, the government has to
decided
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decide
where more investment is vital.
on
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On
the one hand, tax payer's earnings have to be applicable in medical care.
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This
is because,
country's most prominent secor
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the country's most prominent sector
country's most prominent sector
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country's most prominent Secor
is
hospital
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a hospital
where every
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day thousand
of people come and get treatments for their illness.
This
sector
is required
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requires
more money for using high technology to identify
malady
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the malady
in
humans body
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the human body
human body
human's body
and give proper treatments.
Additionally
, there are many
ailements
violent or severe weather (viewed as caused by the action of the four elements)
elements
ailments
that have infected
humans
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human
organs that sometimes turned into
plague
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a plague
the plague
.
For instance
, recent epidemic disease
coronavirus
is now life threatening infection which killed and infected many people in China.
Consequently
, if the
chinese
a native or inhabitant of Communist China or of Nationalist China
Chinese
government
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puts
more money on the research of
this
virus
this
not only helps people but will
also
improve the advancement of medical science.
On the other hand
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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