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Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and more creativity than reading. To what extent do you agree? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer.

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It is argued that some games are more effective to improve children's creativity compares to read a book. In my opinion, I believe that enjoy an activity and playing games are essential to expanding the imagination of a child, but reading is important too.
First
 of all, activities that develop the creative skills of children must be included in the curricula of all schools, because they are crucial for expanding imagination as well as, solving actual and future problems in an
ingenuity
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ingenious
 way.
In other words
, being
creatives
having the ability or power to create
creative
, children can learn to face their future and issues.
For example
, a possible way to
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apply, that
that is
 that
schoolers
a learned person (especially in the humanities); someone who by long study has gained mastery in one or more disciplines
scholars
 have to create characters of a story that they thought, and think about the clothing that they should wear and drawing them.
On the other hand
, reading books and short stories,
such
 as fantasy ones, are important for children, due to they can learn not just grammar and get new vocabulary,
also
, they can imagine the whole story in their minds and guess what could happen
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 the
next
 chapter. Another important factor is curiosity, which is going to increase too.
For instance
, I started to read books at home when I was 8 years old, and I loved to write and imagine short stories since the resources that
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readers
 provided me.
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 sum up, creative activities and reading are important for developing children's creativity. In my view, they have to be applied together, being a balance between them the best option.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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