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The graph below gives information about car ownership in Britain from 1971 to 2007.

The graph below gives information about car ownership in Britain from 1971 to 2007.
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The graph illustrates the percentage of
car
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 ownership in Great
Britain
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 over a period of 36 years. At first glance, it can be concluded that the percentage of one
car
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 stays relatively the same,
while
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 People with no
car
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 show a dramatic decrease,
on the other hand
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, the amount of two
cars
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 and three or more
cars
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 experienced a significant rise and a small rise respectively. In 1971, nearly 50
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percent
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per cent
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 of GB had no
car
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while
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near
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nearly
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 44.4
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percent
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per cent
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 of
Britain
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's families had one
car
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. By the way, around 8
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percent
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per cent
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 of
Britain
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's households had two
cars
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 and households with three or more
cars
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 were uncommon,
only
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with only
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 1
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percent
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per cent
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 of society members falling into
this
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 category. In 2003, there was an impressively rose in people with two
cars
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 that came from 10
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percent
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per cent
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 in 1975 to 26
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percent
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per cent
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 in 2003, having said that,
Britain
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 households with no
car
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 showed a massive drop from 53
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percent
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per cent
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 in 1971 to nearly 25
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percent
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per cent
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 in 2003.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, britain, cars, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • household
  • trend
  • fluctuate
  • increase
  • decrease
  • ownership
  • period
  • peak
  • dip
  • noteworthy
  • consistent
  • dramatic
  • highlight
  • significant
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