IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7

It is too expensive to look after and repair old buildings. This money should be spent on building modern buildings instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#repair #buildings #money
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Recently, it has become a matter of debate whether
money
Use synonyms
 should be spent on building new infrastructure rather than maintaining or repairing the old vintage monuments and building that holds historically valuable information and bring lots of opportunities for the
country
Use synonyms
. It is certainly true that old buildings are not easy to take care and they are high on maintenance as compared to newly build infrastructure. In my opinion I completely disagree with
this
Linking Words
 idea as old buildings play an important role describing and unfold the history and are important to be taken care rather than building new structures.
This
Linking Words
 essay will shed light on factors why it's important to maintain old monuments and building
instead
Linking Words
 of spending
money
Use synonyms
 on new infrastructure.
In addition
Linking Words
 to that old monuments and buildings are unique have significance and people love to know about, t, These old historical buildings brings employment and tourist to the cities that help grow economically as well as many people from the
country
Use synonyms
 get jobs. There are several examples of old monuments and vintage old buildings that are unique
for example
Linking Words
 Ajanta Caves located in Maharashtra, Which have some amazing stone carved into life of Buddha with huge sculptures That cannot be built again. These kind of distinctive monuments attracts other people to visit and help local people getting financial growth.
f
Linking Words
or
Suggestion
For
instance, many governments spend million of dollars on their old historical buildings so the don't loose their tourist and historical values. In conclusion, spending
money
Use synonyms
 on old construction and preserving them is good for the
country
Use synonyms
instead
Linking Words
 of spending
money
Use synonyms
 on the new property. Old and Historical structure are important and bring economical growth to the
country
Use synonyms
 by bringing tourist jobs and raising some awareness about these places among other
country
Use synonyms
.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: